The Official Writing Challenge
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06/06/05
There's no better reason to be "gullible" in someone else's eyes. Nice story, dialog and wonderful writing!
06/07/05
What a heart warming piece! I could see these kids walking down the street. I was so happy that the 'gullible girl' caught that twig in the end! It was a nice way to finish up.
06/07/05
Very clever! I myself have never kicked a twig down a sidewalk, but these characters seem to be pros at it. Good job!
06/08/05
Clever and a fun read. I lost some of the characters about mid way, confused them...I think some times and afirmation for clarity sake is okay.
06/08/05
A fun read with a sound message. Thanks for the smile.
Great job. This is vivid, powerful writing and you deliver a great message. Excellent work. One of the best I've read.
06/09/05
Good depiction of the characters. I like the way Lisa Jean stayed true to her beliefs, despite just being made into a joke. The resiting of the temptation to get back at them was done well also.
06/09/05
Creative take on the topic. I'm glad she stood for truth.
06/10/05
Well told story with believable characterisation. Good premise that you carried through from beginning to end.
06/10/05
Gotcha Wendy! I enjoyed this ... the message was good! I don't think the presentation was as strong as some of your others (but your others are so excellent!) but that doesn't take away from the concept and message! :-)
06/11/05
Great job, Wendy! Clever concept, believable dialogue, sound message. Held my interest the whole way through.
Love, Lynda
06/11/05
"..new gifts from God." ;) Loved it! Could see this as a skit for young youth! Really! Everything was Great!
06/12/05
Beautifully written piece. I believe it would make an excellent book so of a Christian Tom Sawyer style. With your talent it could become a Christian classic. You're so good that others recognize your style. Some of those that critqued you are very talented themselves. That speaks volumns about your talent!
06/12/05
Loved the dialogue! Wonderful writing. Very polished