The Official Writing Challenge
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There's no better reason to be "gullible" in someone else's eyes. Nice story, dialog and wonderful writing!
What a heart warming piece! I could see these kids walking down the street. I was so happy that the 'gullible girl' caught that twig in the end! It was a nice way to finish up.
Very clever! I myself have never kicked a twig down a sidewalk, but these characters seem to be pros at it. Good job!
Clever and a fun read. I lost some of the characters about mid way, confused them...I think some times and afirmation for clarity sake is okay.
A fun read with a sound message. Thanks for the smile.
Great job. This is vivid, powerful writing and you deliver a great message. Excellent work. One of the best I've read.
Good depiction of the characters. I like the way Lisa Jean stayed true to her beliefs, despite just being made into a joke. The resiting of the temptation to get back at them was done well also.
Creative take on the topic. I'm glad she stood for truth.
Well told story with believable characterisation. Good premise that you carried through from beginning to end.
Gotcha Wendy! I enjoyed this ... the message was good! I don't think the presentation was as strong as some of your others (but your others are so excellent!) but that doesn't take away from the concept and message! :-)
Great job, Wendy! Clever concept, believable dialogue, sound message. Held my interest the whole way through.
Love, Lynda
" gifts from God." ;) Loved it! Could see this as a skit for young youth! Really! Everything was Great!
Beautifully written piece. I believe it would make an excellent book so of a Christian Tom Sawyer style. With your talent it could become a Christian classic. You're so good that others recognize your style. Some of those that critqued you are very talented themselves. That speaks volumns about your talent!
Loved the dialogue! Wonderful writing. Very polished