The Official Writing Challenge
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This brought tears to my eyes, such a special story and a special little girl! I was rooting for Loni that her dad would come back and that she'd be able to share the daffodils with him! This is a great piece of writing-I loved it!
The deep bond between father and daughter is wonderful.

I did have to re-read this to understand how the first section connected to the others. I assumed the father died, so it didn't work with the rest of the story. Would it be possible to say he didn't live there anymore, or had moved out?

The newspaper ending was a great touch!
04/24/08
This was beautiful, melancholy and so very sweet. Loved the ending. Great job!
04/24/08
Good story! It has good characterization and interesting plot, too. I enjoyed reading this and glad to have a happy ending!
05/02/08
This is charming. I had no idea where it was going, but it kept me very interested and on the edge of my seat asking questions like "Did he die? Did he leave? Is the story going to the past when he died?" But, the end...with the paper...and the ad...wow. Thanks for such creative writing. If only...