The Official Writing Challenge
This article has been read 746 times
Member Comments
I feel for Elizabeth! I'm glad that she was able to 'get through' to her Papa and that he did begin to return-slowly. You did so well with the atmosphere here! I really liked it. ^_^
Your voice sounds authentic for an 8-year child, yet shares a very adult lesson. Good conflict with promising resolution.
I'd love to read more about this family and the transition this man made once he returned to his family after his terrible experience in the POW camp. Kept my interest all the way through.
This is so heartwarming, and written with great gentleness and authenticity.

I'd have liked to see it end with "Thank you, Elizabeth." The rest is telling the reader what we already know, because you led us there so beautifully.
You set the mood so well. I can feel her joy when he says her name. (Just visited olg 96 year old granny and she said my name-what joy!)
Thanks for the hint or I may have missed this.