The Official Writing Challenge
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Amazing atmosphere, and an expert job with the dialog. I would love to hear this read aloud.
I love this story. I love the dialect, though it was a little hard to read in places, but worth the effort of sounding it out to get the effect. You create an amazingly believable character and the setting is so real. Loved it!
Love the dialect and could hear it aloud in my mind, it was so vivid. I had to invent the rest of the MC in my imagination. I wonder if she looked anything like you imagined her?
Loved the idea! I thought it hard to read the dialect, but I know you wanted to be authentic. Perhaps it could be toned down just a bit and still have the effect you intended. The writing was sooo well done!
I like the dialect. I like the character-even the old mule took on a real shape and form. I wish I could read more about their adventures and what happens to them once they start their new life. I suspect I already know. Love the title.