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How precious...
Truly on topic and well done.
Darling story. The cute title helped set the tone.
Such a wise mother! I really enjoyed the daughter's reaction to having succeeded at apologizing. Well written story with a great message.
Charming story on this topic! I love the image you created with this phrase, "running feet, happy feet, relieved feet." Nice and vivid description of confession and forgiveness. I also like the lisp of the little brother-how cute!
Very realistic dialog and a wonderful lesson. Enjoyed this.

This story is refreshing. It has great dialogue, distinct characters and a life-giving lesson to boot. Way to go!
Delightful in every way! Really enjoyed the read!
Truly enjoyable. I love this line: "Can't you just give me a spanking?" Really shows how horrified she is at the thought of telling on herself and apologizing.
Precious! Very true-to-life children, and a super application of the topic.
This is really good. The dialogue was very realistic, and your writing brought the story to life. Great job with the topic.
I loved this - perfectly on topic and your dialogue is wonderful :)
Vonnie, dear -- I just love this story! Great writing!
What a great story and so wonderfully written.I have grandkids that age now but well remember the days,
I can relate to so much of this. God has entrusted with the raising and bringing up of children.
God tells us in Proverbs to raise up a child in the way he should go and when he is old he will not depart from it.(he or she) God bless you for handling it God's way.