The Official Writing Challenge
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11/29/07
Wow, this is cool! I love the repetition!
11/29/07
This is stupendous! I suspect I know who wrote this, and it tickles me no end. Deceptively simple, and simply deep...
Unique, fun and I loved the ending!
12/01/07
Very good. I was actually singing this instead of reading:)
Laury
12/01/07
I thoroughly enjoyed how unique this one was.
12/05/07
Lovely lyrics. Did you write them with a tune in mind? I loved the surprise ending.
12/05/07
Love this beautifully simple, profound little verse. Exactly right.
Indeed this is uniquely creative. I loved the rhythm and the message.
12/05/07
best I've come across this week. it actually stopped me in my mental tracks and replaced "critique this one" with "experience this one."
oooooh! You are being...ahem..creative? Lolz. I liked this, the title had my attention and the repitition was well done. I think it made it come out as a song in my head as I read it through. The last line though-was the crowning moment. Loved it!
This had such wonderful rythm I found myself singing it in my mind as I read. You are very talented and creative.