The Official Writing Challenge
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This is very touching. I liked the easy conversational tone of the letter and the message that evangelism is done best, not by hitting people over the head with Jesus, but by living our faith before others. My favorite part was where Patrick overheard Thumper praying for the mom.
11/11/07
I thought this was a useful vehicle for expressing the power of testimony and day-by-day witness. I was glad that Patrick took his time in becoming a believer as this made his conversion much more believable.
Some aspects of the letter seemed forced. The longer quotations of direct speech struck me as unnatural for such a formal letter. Likewise Patrick is in a hurry to get to his topic and so glosses over the condolences to a grieving mother that would have been expected. So a little more work on style, but basically a nice idea.
Creative approach, strong message, wonderful.