The Official Writing Challenge
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09/07/07
Very well written. It's good that Grandma led by example--handing out tracts and witnessing is something that's not done enough. Good job.
09/08/07
This is well written.
This is an excellent story, showing the beginning of boldness in a child to share her faith.
09/11/07
I grew up in the church. Beginning my sophmore year of college I started being absent from the church for about ten or twelve years. I finally came back about the time I turned thirty, but I was there because had to be in church on Sunday to play church league softball on Tuesday. When I was 36 I read a tract about the Rapture. That night I gave my life to Christ. Thanks for your story.
Well done! A lovely true story- Oh, for the faith and simplicity of a child! In a few spots, especially in the beginning where you're trying to establish the POV of a child, you may want to tone down the vocab a little and use words and phrases that reflect child-like thinking. At the point where you actually express Suzie's thoughts, I think you really hit your stride--excellent writing!