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This is sad as well. Nicely told, a couple punctuation marks were off, perhaps typos. Nice job!
Very well told, but sad story. I love the ending you chose. Nice job!
This is a good story for teens. Unfortunately, many teens have troubled homes like this one.
This sad story of a very embarrassing event was very well told. Great job. The dialogue is very good!
Like the others, I LOVE the ending! Great characterization here.
Great story, well-plotted, and a realistic situation. My only quibble is that in a few places the teens don't sound quite like teens in my experience.

My heart goes out to this girl and her mother...your characterization of them really tugs at me.
Very real in some spots - like being in youth group but still thinking it's okay to lie to your parents - those are real struggles at that age. good job
Adults do heap embarrassment upon teens. It's hard enough without adding being drunk into the mix. A thought provoking piece.
The ending felt a little abrupt, but it's a good story.