The Official Writing Challenge
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06/07/07
I am happy to be the first person to comment on this delightful story. It's charming. I loved the title. I've noticed how parents buy many, many sleepytime books (I wonder why?) By the title, I thought you had something going, but when I read this story, I knew..... What an original angle, to speak of night workers who don't sleep...and work it into our God who never sleeps. The rhyme was delightful, too. It seemed like a winning idea for a book. Go for it!
This is a wonderful children's story. The musical lyrics of the refrain are lovely, and the message is just right. I can hear a little one saying, "Read it again."
06/10/07
Oh, this is really a wonderful story poem. The words are beautifully rhymed and flowing. A child would love this at bedtime!
06/10/07
Lovely nighttime story-poem that I'm sure small children would enjoy hearing over and over again! Nice job with the flow and rhyme. Great message, too! :)
06/11/07
Love the title and the delightful poem delivered! Sure to please the wee ones!
06/11/07
I really like your poem too. The refrain is very good and adds a lot to the overall effect of the poem. Very, very good writing.
I'm sure children will love this lullaby. Congrats on the win.
Wonderful!!!!! A well-deserved win! Congratulations.
Indeed, this is a perfectly beautiful poem. I'm so glad it won! Congratulations!
Congrats on winning 1st place!Awesome! What a beautifully written story. I like daddy's explanation and the rhythm of the lines, especially the repeated verses. it has such a lullabye affect to it. YAWN....ok,I'm nodding. This is so good!Janice
06/14/07
Oh, Sharlyn, this is absolutely LOVELY! Congrats on your win - it is SO well-deserved!
06/14/07
Hey, Sharlyn! Congratulations! First place in Editor's Choice! Your story really topped the chart. You really should go for a book! Fantastic work, friend!
06/14/07
Yay! This was one of my favorites. Congratulations!
06/14/07
Congratulations. This is really sweet. A great bedtime story.
06/14/07
CONGRATULATIONS on your well-deserved 1ST PLACE win in Advanced! I loved this piece! :D
06/14/07
Oh, this is delightful! Certainly a well-deserved win.
06/14/07
Excellent!
06/14/07
I want a child to read this to!! :) Congrats - this is absolutely delightfully wonderful.
06/15/07
Ah, this is lovely. A well-deserved win. Excellent!
09/19/07
This is REALLY good! It's fun with a message, too.
Laury