The Official Writing Challenge
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Clever. Definitely clever. Nice work!
Great entry - unique and well written. The only suggestion I would have is to put little breaks(like **) in between each perspective. It confused me for a second before I realized the switch. But that's probably just me. LOL. Otherwise, it was a wonderfully clever piece that tugged the heart a bit.
Blessings, Lynda
What a great story! Good syntax, excellent sentence structure. I especially like the way you handled descriptions. Bert's nose turning an interesting shade of red. You showed and did not tell. Yah for you! (Obviously, that's my downfall!)
Overall, a great story. The spy cam was great. I didn't see it coming.
Interesting little peice.
Loved the last line. Wow.... you've got to have quite a creative mind to write something like this. Well done!
Very interesting! Clever writing! Nice work!
Loved the little details that we can all relate to like the tape sticking to our fingers. A well constructed story wth a neat twist in it for ryan.
Fun story with a couple of great twists. Loved the ending!
This is a wonderful story. I'll have to read up on Troy to understand its significance, but the story is still great.
Very very good!