The Official Writing Challenge
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05/31/07
Torie felt like a pin-ball as they bounced from one rock to another -- I love the word picture that this sentence creates. Nice job. Blessings, Cheri
06/02/07
You really put us in the middle of the action - great description, and I love how the lesson flows so naturally from it. Great job!
Well done!:0) I like your descriptions and the way your story moves just like the river the characters were trying to pass through.Very nice comparisons with life itself. Keep up the great writing:0) God bless your gift.:0)Janice
06/04/07
Wonderful job on character development--difficult to do in so few words!
This is an excellent story with the message tucked inside just right.
06/04/07
Your descriptions put me smack in the middle of the rapids with your characters - and I felt like I knew them, too. Wonderful job!
Good action. I found myself reading faster and faster. Very nicely done.
I really enjoyed this. The dialogue was great and the characters very real.
Very cute! The adventure is breathless, battering rapids, a near fight for your very life. Loved the descriptions and especially the ending...was that a hint of romance? ^_^
Good story and pov. I sense a "melting" heart here.
06/07/07
Great adventure! Love it!
06/08/07
Fast paced visual story with just enough introduction to set the scene and then you plunged right in. Good character development and interaction. Enjoyed every bit of it.
07/15/07
It's always good to go with someone who knows the rapids. They may not know the river you're on but can "read" the rapids. My first time down I learned a lot from those who have gone on before and can now pass their wisdom on to those who follow. Good job.