The Official Writing Challenge
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Very well written account of what happened after being banished from the garden. It took me a while to figure out who the story was about - Thanks for keeping me guessing!
Absolutely amazing description. It also took me quite a while to figure out who these people were (LOL you should have been in my mind as I mentally scanned every bible story I could think of), but it made the read that much more engaging. This is so very vivid, and what an incredible read! You have a gift for description.
Boy, was my mind flipping through stories, trying to place this one!! :-) I've wondered how it must've been for Adam and Eve--but you put it in color. I especially liked the glorified worm slithering in and biting--great imagery! good job!
Wow! I love the way you described how it might have been from the perspective of Adam. Great job!
I enjoyed this very much...well done!
Well-done. Very descriptive and kept me intrigued to the end.
I'll have to hand it to you. You have wonderfully descriptive abilities. This is a very good piece and I really enjoyed reading it. Good job!
I'm glad she ended by laughing. That was neat. Good writing!