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03/09/07
beautiful descriptions - makes me wish my daughter had gotten her gown made:) The shift in tenses at the end caught me but I think I understand what you were doing. Very nice story and good writing:)
03/10/07
This was an interesting story. It was very different and it kept my attention the whole time. Great description and message.
03/10/07
Good job of description. I really enjoyed reading your story. It has a nice message, too. I liked the comparison to the malls with fountains. Good contrast.
Very well done. Though, I would have liked to hear about the proposal, and the secret it held for both the narrator and Gran. It was kinda' thrown in with no explanation.
This is such a wonderful story of values and timelessness. Such a wise, patient grandmother...the best kind of teacher. Nice job and wonderful descriptions.
03/13/07
I like this story! It was well written, although the shifts into the past and back to present could have been clearer, but I did get it. :) Loved the sewing details and the part about the dress being "her". My sister made my wedding gown and I remember picking out my pattern and satin and things. This really brought back memories. Good job!
Beautifully written; your eye for detail captures this story and your wise gran exactly. PS I see one orf your pieces has been chosen for Lori Wagner's affirmingfaith project? Have you any previous experience of these books, as one of mine has also been selected?