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Wow, what a tragic turn of events, and then yet another. You had me captivated in both the action packed sequence and the more quiet opening paragraphs. Nice job.
Great ending, but sadder than I like. It reminded me of the ending in "My Sister's Keeper," by Jodi Picoult. So how will this affect Danny? I think there needs to be more to this story! Good job!
This story haunted me. I loved the unexpected ironic twist of the suicidal potential victim becoming the rescuer of the lifeguard--even at cost of her own life! Sad yet very beautiful and wonderfully creative.

I also enjoyed the portrayal of the lifeguard himself, how he used conversation creatively to take the woman's attention off herself and onto others. Great job!