The Official Writing Challenge
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11/04/06
I really enjoyed this, especially the last paragraph, though I must admit that, if I was supposed to figure out what this man was going through there, I didn't. If you left it vague on purpose, then I DID get it! Anyhow - your description throughout was very vivid and realistic, and the piece flowed nicely. Great job!
11/05/06
Beautiful! Just beautiful! I thought it well written with wit, but a few boo-boos in duplicated words and a mispelled "they"...but all in all a great read, and a very touching story which is etched in my mind...loved it!
12/02/06
You have such a way with words. This story deserves more comments! Readers have to relish how your precise descriptions put us right in the narrator's shoes, identifying with his fears and woes. You'll have to let us know when we can buy your books!