The Official Writing Challenge
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"his feet making no sound in the deep, dark pile of the carpet. Heavy drapes covering the windows deadened even the whispers in this room." Very descriptive. I could see it. "steepled fingers" - ver visual. I liked that.
Great concept but you could have used your remaining 200 words to better effect: increase the contrast between the two candidates, work on the dialogue to give the candidates more personality at present the supporting characters are better described than the protagonists themselves
10/21/06 now we need to know what happens. I hope this will be part of a novel someday. It cries out to be expanded! I'm intrigued with this good vs. evil story-in-the-making. Nice writing!
Perfect! Creative and timely. Any more words would have spoiled the brevity of this story - making it too long and boring. Perfect, as is! Good Points, Great Job, and an interesting read. Kudos!