The Official Writing Challenge
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With no scripture reference, I assume this is fiction. However, very creative, nicely written and on topic!
Your story telling style is gripping. You kept my attention all the way from beginning to end. I am not familiar enough with the story to know what is scriptural and what is not, but now I am motivated to look it up. It would be helpful to have a reference for the basis for the story, or else more of an explanation at the end, but I have nothing but praise for your writing technique!
A very compelling read! Definitely captured my imagination. Great description and dialogue.
Excellent! I could definitely envision this story clearly. I was captivated by your eloquent words. Well done! Thanks for sharing it.
Wow! Great writing! I especially loved the end.
Great story. I can't imagine living through that! In 'looking' for suggestions, the only thing that stood out to me was a shade of redundancy in the following sentence: "Josiah knowingly marched on with purpose" But that's nit picky. Good work.
Well done!
Very well told and nicely written. One little suggestion would be to eliminate the dialogue tag "Josiah hissed..." Instead: "'Ssshh. You'll see.' Josiah reached for one..." Hissed is unnecessary because of the dialogue "Ssshh." This was a very intersting story that I really enjoyed. Great job!