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Ah...such a beautiful scene. I wouldn't scoff - I'd want to go there too. This is very creative and well written; I enjoyed the short trip 'beyond the river'. Enchanting - Great job!
Okay, this freaks me out a little--makes me feel like I need to hold my breath--but that's good, you've done a great job of describing this "secret world", and it seems very real.
I wondered what would make "you" jump in fully clothed? And then keep on going inspite of the air running out ... then I clued in ... duh ...
Definitely loved the images here - would have LOVED for you to expand a bit more - add some more detail of the whole experience, but perhaps that's just me! I SO wanted to hear more about your "journey." Very nice!
Very well done. It definitely makes me want to go there, too! Excellent description!
I felt the reverence of the moment. Loved it!
Love the imagery and the mysticism of this piece. Good job taking us to a place of peace and love. :) Jo
I'm with others saying, "Tell me more!" I wondered too about why you jumped in - it sounds like suicide and concludes with 'Hey, be loved, and have another go at life'. Yet when I went back to the top, I realized that there wasn't that sort of build up ... it was more curiosity????

Anyhow, I love the other-worldly-nature of the piece. Well done.