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Topic: IT IS WELL WITH MY SOUL (don't write about the song) (04/02/15)
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TITLE: Moments To Live | Previous Challenge Entry
By Robyn Harbour
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The pain was like a sharp knife stabbing with intensity deep into my chest. I was only fifty-one and in the middle of packing to move from the farm to our dream home in the city. I sent up a quick prayer to God and using the wall as a support slowly slid down until I was sitting on the hallway floor.
My husband was working the sheep in the top paddock, our youngest son was watching afternoon TV in the family room and was too far away to hear me call out. If I did make it to the phone it was still at least an hour before an ambulance could arrive.
Considering my options, I was convinced that these were my last few minutes on this earth. I decided that I would spend what time I had left praying for my family and its future. I did not want to lose this opportunity, my last to invest in heartfelt prayer for those I loved the most.
Trying to block out the pain I continued to pray for my family one by one. My husband would have to adjust to living in the city alone. Our two daughters, newly married, would not have a mother to ask advice from. Our last born, a son, would find life hard without his mother.
After a while the pain subsided, I was not going to die that day after all. Perhaps the pain was the stress of working full time and packing up our home.
Fifteen years on I can with absolute confidence that my place in Heaven does not depend on how good I am but on what Jesus has done for me. It is definitely well with my soul.
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If I could give a little hint on how to make it more dramatic, ask yourself what thoughts or pictures were going through your mind and what was that doing to you. Were your palms sweaty, was your vision blurred, knees weak? etc. Could you picture your hubby battling to cook without you? Your son wondering who he could tell his story to?
Still a great story, with a happy ending. God is good.
I find it inspiring to hear how you prayed for your family while going through the agony of the pain.
Beautiful statement of faith.
God bless you~
Also, don't be afraid to actually include the words in your prayer. By putting them in italics, it will stand out to the reader and might show someone who doesn't know how to pray.
You really did do a great job. I could feel the MC's anxiety and definitely relate it to a time in my life when I almost died. I like how you show that scary episode didn't discourage you, but instead brought you peace. What a wonderful message. It will comfort many people and help them look at things in a different way. Great job.