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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Day's End (01/01/14)
Quick to listen, slow to anger and slow to speak
Keeping your commandments, your face I do seek

Being at peace, as far as it depends on me
Loving my neighbor, actually everyone I see

Casting my cares all upon you
The needs in my life you already knew

Bearing others burdens to fulfill your law
Praying your lost children will answer your call

Sharing the laughter and tears of my peers
Praying with them and knowing you hear

Forgiving the hurts of the past days gone by
The right to hold grudges is one of the devil's big lies

Serving those called the least of these
Place them in my path, oh Lord won't you please.

Loving you Lord with all that’s in me
And loving others as myself, fulfilling your decree

At the end of each day, when I lay down my head
I pray all of these are things that of me can be said.
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Jan Ackerson
01/10/14
I’d love to have your input into the free writing lessons available on the FaithWriters forums. This week’s lesson is on writing devotionals, and next week will cover writing on topic for the weekly challenge. Look for it at http://www.faithwriters.com/Boards/phpBB2/viewforum.php?f=67, or if you’re on Facebook, you can “like” Faithwriters Writing Lessons.
C D Swanson 
01/10/14
I really enjoy devotional poems. Well done and well said.

God bless~
Amelia Brown 
01/10/14
well said. A very lovely poem.
Jan Ackerson
01/11/14
Your prayer is one that we all share--thanks for posting it here.

I encourage you to work to make your meter more consistent. For example, your lines vary from 8 to 14 syllables, with no particular pattern. Your poetry will have a smoother flow as you work to have more consistent meter.

As far as the content of this little gem--may it be said of me, as well!