The Official Writing Challenge
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08/10/06
I really loved this poem! There are some places that need fixed up, but I still felt the heart in the message...and it was very powerful.
08/11/06
A warning that everyone should take to heart! Work on consistent meter and avoiding forced rhymes. A heartfelt, touching poem.
08/12/06
This is really a great poem! An awesome message. Clean it up here and there and it will be ready for publishing!
Some of your rhymes sound a little forced, but you share a good message here. No one should pretend that it is safe to procrastinate in following Christ.