The Official Writing Challenge
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05/27/06
Nice poem. I escpecially liked:
'There, it comes to me in a flash
Who steals my purse steals only trash.
They can’t take what the Master gives
True joy is found in one who lives'
A scripture quote at the end is always helpful if you've alluded to something particular.
05/29/06
Very nicely done. I'm not a poetry expert, but I enjoyed your work.
05/31/06
A well written piece of poetry which has a clear outline. Te idea is expressed poetically and well. The permanence of God given joy is contrasted to the ephemeral joy that money offers. Please continue to write and God bless you!
06/24/06
I too enjoyed the 5th verse the most, too. Very good imagery. Like the way you compare the constancy of Gods' love to the 'simple' things of life. Yeggy