The Official Writing Challenge
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Enjoyed this, but felt a bit let down when it was only a dream. Powerful writing, though...I really cared about your character.
I agree with the previous comment; I think this would have had a tremendous "punch" if your main character really DID have to rely on God's strength in the tragic situation. You did a good job with the family scenes and in creating a believable character that your readers will "root" for.
I liked the ending. So many stories end in tragedy and grief. It was a pleasant surprise and sense of relief in the end. Good story.
I was pulled into your story immediately and was captivated all the way to the end. I too was disappointed in the dream ending. Using this approach often leaves the reader feeling cheated - as if the emotions invested in the story were all for naught. I really enjoyed your style and voice. You are a very good writer.