The Official Writing Challenge
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Good stuff. See if you can tighten up a little on spelling and punctuation (PM me if you want more details) and then it would be very good.
Wonderful entry! I was caught from the very beginning. Great job!!

Peace & Joy, Rita
I love the line about obedience to God is te only way to come out on top!
I liked the way God showed her His truth through human children and their father. Work on sentence structure a bit to improve readabilty and "flow." A nice slice-of-life story.
I would have liked to have seen this as monologue. But as it is, you have good stuff here.