The Official Writing Challenge
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02/28/06
This is very nice, and the metaphor of the sea is sustained well througout the poem. Good job on the rhyming, too. A little more work on the rhythm, especially in a poem like this, will suggest the motion of the waves. Thanks for this lovely verse.
I agree with Jan. Very good rhyme scheme, just a little work on the meter. Good job.
03/05/06
Very nice