The Official Writing Challenge
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You certainly are a great story teller. Even though I have read different versions of this biblical episode, I must say you have given it a life of its own in a new and endearing way. It captivated me throughout.
This was VERY well written and a wonderful version of this story. I enjoyed it!
You made it so real that I wept; which, incidentally, I do quite often when reading about, or speaking of, the Savior, MY Savior. You have a way with words! One suggestion: For Readers who are unbelievers or not failiar with the would be helpful to place a footnote with the Scripture where this story can be found.
I really like the telling of this story. It was like you were privy to the thoughts and conversation that day. The only thing, which I feel gives it even more impact, is Jesus told him to let down their "nets", and Simon let down "a net" singular. He respected Jesus so he wanted to do as he requested but he really didn't believe he would catch anything. That is why he responded like he did, "leave me Lord for I am a sinful man.." Luke 5:4-9. You are an excellent storyteller keep up the good work and God bless you.
Your writing painted a vivid portrait - I felt like I was right there alongside the Master. Good work! ~Gwynn
Great retelling of the biblical story! I was captivated the whole way through!

Congrats on your win!
Agree with all of the above. You really made the story come alive through the dialogue and by helping the readers to "know" what the men were thinking. Congratulations!