The Official Writing Challenge
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Your writing is very clear and flows very well. Great story!
Good story and it did flow well.
"sole to sole like two hands together in prayer." Good picture.
The main thing I have to say is I think the story would be just as good if Glory was a real person, and left out the paragraph after "created good memories" and the last sentence.
Keep writing.
These two lines were lovely, "and it was getting very hard to live with him. Now she didn’t know how to live without him."

One of your paragraphs ends oddly. "Sarah was from a different time period and often didn’t understand her references. I will be your friend." I am not sure whether you edited something incorrectly.

I loved the story, and it reminds me of the scripture where we entertain angels.
I loved this story!

The lines about being your husband, and being your friend were confusing. I think you meant to show it was God speaking to you. When I use that format, separate it from the paragraph, and put in italics.

Keep on writing!

Congratulations on ranking 9th overall!
Congratulations on placing top for Beginner/Intermediates for 3rd Quarter, January - March 2023!!! Well done!

What a beautiful story! I loved the pictures in your story.

It was hard living with him but she did not know how she could live without him.

A visit by an angel.

I liked the struggle you created with living with someone that has a serious illness.

Well deserved quarterly win!