The Official Writing Challenge
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08/28/21
You share the same wonder of the beach as I do. I love being at the beach. I find God so revealing in many ways. I think you used the word of the week to your advantage in your descriptive piece. I did find that there were some places where I felt that punctuation was necessary, but other than that, I could find nothing that I didn't enjoy about this piece. Blessings!
08/28/21
Amen!
This was beautiful, thank you.

Blessings~
This is a lovely descriptive piece. I can easily picture the colors, sounds, and even smells. I also can feel the emotions of joy and a bit of sadness and can relate. I'm not a big fan of switching voices from first person (I) to second (you). It can work at times, but for me it feels like the author is pulling away just when I felt so close. You inspired me with your words. I particularly can relate to God showing off. I often just stand outside and whisper wow!
09/01/21
Very descriptive work. I could feel the warm sand on my feet and the beauty of those Florida sunsets.
Thank you
09/01/21
Excellent writing. I enjoyed especially as you mirror my feelings.