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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: MEMORY LANE (04/23/20)
It was a beautiful Autumn day in New England, and I was on a 30-day leave from Vandenburg AFB in Calif. Going home to visit my family as I hadn't seen them in one and a half years. As the airplane was banking right preparing to land, I could see smoke from many house chimneys, and I could almost smell that very familiar scent. As I continued to stare out of the window from my uncomfortable aisle seat, once again, I was amazed just how great my God is. You see, I don't get excited over flowers and such, but the leaves in the New England states are unparalleled. I instantaneously was reminded just how beautiful the foliage could be in my beloved New England states, this time of year. The colors were so Vibrant, and likewise, Stunning to me, and they ushered fond memories of my past flooding my mind's eye. Just then, my plane touched down on the runway at Bradley International Airport as scheduled.

Dad was there to pick me up, and it was good having that one on one time with Dad once again. Catching up with him was meaningful for me, as we always had a great relationship. For the rest of that day into the evening, I stayed home with Mom, Dad, and my younger siblings. Between you and me, I sincerely was wishing that my older brother would stop by, but that wasn't the case. We spoke on the telephone, and he promised that we would spend the whole day tomorrow hanging out.

The next morning around 10:30 a.m., my brother Harry showed up. We also had the opportunity to catch up; you see, he had joined the USAF a few years before me. And he had already been mustered out a little over two years and was settled into his life. He wanted to make a stop by his best friend's parent's house to pick up DD his friend and roommate, and by the time we arrived, his mom was already preparing the noonday meal. You see, DD's dad worked the second shift at the plant, and his mom wanted her husband to have his main meal at this time.

I entered the house and immediately greeted by some of the nice's folks that I had ever met. And at once, they invited me to eat with them, and I could tell that they would not take no for an answer. During the meal, DD's sister entered the room, and I felt like I was in the presence of an angel. When introduced to her, it was as if time stood still. It's a good thing that I didn't have any food in my mouth, who knows what would have happened. It so it could have been launched across the room or directly at her face, or it could have become caught in my throat, etc. When I heard her speak, I knew that she was not like any female that I had ever met, I could tell that this woman had some real education. She attended the University of Massachusetts and was home for the weekend.
I could hardly keep my eyes off of this angel, sent by God.
After the meal, the menfolk went into the kitchen, and we sat at the table talking. DD's dad was in a small room just off the kitchen, putting on his work boots as he was going to exit the back door. Would you believe that this beautiful angel came in and started washing dishes, isn't God good.

I found out from my brother Harry that she was dating a six foot three, one hundred and ninety-pound wide receiver. While I was five foot nine inches tall and I was a 170-pounder and a reasonably new United States Air Force Buck Sergeant, I didn't care about his size or any repercussions that possibly may come my way; All I knew was I wanted to take her out. I went from being known as Harry's younger brother to JW. Do you believe in Love at first sight, well I do, we have now been married for fifty and one-half years?
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Marilyn (Marolyn) Tocker 
05/01/20
I enjoyed your descriptive introductory paragraph in particular. I felt I was right there seeing the smoke and the leaves.
Happy for the way it ended.
Keep writing.
Carolyn Ahrens 
05/01/20
I too, felt like I was a fly on the wall watching everything unfold. Good job.
Susara A Botes
05/01/20
Be watchful for too long sentences. Edit again before you submit. Keep writing.
Barbara Lynn Culler 
05/02/20
Great memory!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
05/05/20
This is a lovely love story. You have some wonderful descriptions. I'd urge you to ask someone to read aloud before submitting. I think it's easier to hear repetitive words and ideas as well as awkward phrasing (if your reader stumbles, you might want to rephrase that part) incomplete sentences or run-ons, spot random capitalization (vibrant), and clichés. (It's almost always better to use your own words versus a saying like presence of an angel.) Also in an article like this, write out abbreviations such as California, Air Force Base, and stay away from etc.) You took me down memory lane and I could easily feel your emotions and almost hear the smile in your voice. You definitely nailed the topic and I'm guessing your family will always cherish this story. Good job.