The Official Writing Challenge
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12/05/19
Good job with the topic and your ability to see and act upon the problem.

Some red ink: take out the word, that. Most of the time you don't need it. Also, add dialogue to make the account more interesting and to add a narrative element to it.
12/05/19
Good story. I also have the tendency to hoard but I'd never admit it! LOL
12/06/19
Interesting story, but jumped around. I had to reread some sentences. Just a little more editing would make this piece much better. Keep writing!
Interesting story. It would read easier had you separated out your quotes, and put the quotation marks around them. Congrats on your completed renovation!
12/08/19
This entry is on topic. If you put a blank line between paragraphs and put quotation marks where someone is speaking, it would make it easier to read. This entry made me smile as I was reading it.