The Official Writing Challenge
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I like the almost stream of consciousness thought that this poem has. I believe we can all relate.

Nicely done.
Great topic. It's so easy to forget what's important.
If we're honest with ourselves, I think many can relate to the thoughts you have shared in this poem, and I can see your words touching many people. Keep writing.
Many of us have experienced this and you well expressed it!
Oh, this is so beautiful, and exudes heart and soul.
I loved it,

Well done,
I enjoyed this. The words just flew off the page creating a vivid picture. I admit I cringed at the line with the double negative (don't pray no more). I understand part might be because of the rhythm you needed, but I wish you had found a way without the double negative. I know I'm too fussy about some grammar rules though, and after I cringed, I continued to enjoy the rest of the poem.