The Official Writing Challenge
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Good for you for managing college courses. It isn't easy, but you did it. It's great that you can write both fiction and non-fiction. Keep writing.
This is wonderful!
I enjoyed it immensely, so inspirational.
Well done,
Good for you- you keep on keeping on! T(his would have been a bit easier to read if you had double spaced between paragraphs.) I know a young women who has autism, and she recently graduated from a JC, and now working on her second degree. Don't ever let anyone tell you you can't do it!
First of all - congratulations for your accomplishments! This story is so real and heart-warming. A few tweaks would make it stellar! First, I would suggest you begin with what the neighbor told you. That makes a great "hook". Use dialog. SHOW the reader what she said, how she said it (was she intentionally cruel or simply thoughtless?) and your internal reaction to it. It seems that's what developed your resolve to achieve - to "prove her wrong" so to speak. Then, I would move your opening paragraph down to where you write that all things are possible with God. Great piece! Keep writing!
I am glad to see that you did not let what your neighbor said discourage you. It made you have the courage to go to school and get your certificate, congratulation. Keep up your creative gifts.It is always good to bring laughter. Keep studying more about the craft of writing.
I am glad you did not get discouraged. I think you are an example of “doing all things through God’s strength.”
This is wonderful! I applaud you for not listening to negative reports about yourself. I wish I had done that earlier in life. Your story is an inspiration to others in the same situation. Double spacing would make it read easier. Well done!