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09/05/19
You told this story so well. It made it all the more poignant being true. What an encouragement. Great writing.
09/05/19
Thoroughly enjoyed this story and was delighted to discover it wasn't fiction. Very well told--great descriptions of the fireworks.
This gave me goosebumps. So scary for anyone, especially children to have to deal with war. That was wise to show her how beautiful the noisy things could be.
09/08/19
This is an excellent read! Such a great example of finding refuge and overcoming fear. Well done!
09/08/19
This is an excellent read! Such a great example of finding refuge and overcoming fear. Well done!
09/09/19
So glad this has a happy ending. I have often wondered how refuges to our country cope with our Fourth of July fireworks.
09/10/19
Great job with the topic, and your writing! Well done
Blessings~
09/10/19
And that fact that it was true, really touched my heart.
Thank you,
Blessings~
I was impressed with your ability to evoke emotion within the reader's mind throughout the entire piece. I actually felt every emotion Fatuma felt from beginning to the end. It was a great read.
09/12/19
I loved everything about this, and like what the other said, was happy to see it was a true story. I hope we see more of what your mom has done for these people. I am sure there is a wealth of material. Great descriptive writing.
This is a great story. You pulled me in right away. I'll admit I drifted a bit with the descriptions of the fireworks, but the other parts were spectacular. Congratulations on ranking 2nd in your level.