The Official Writing Challenge
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Quite the colorful story here. But really, I'm confused. You start out in the narrative form talking about PJ, then suddenly you are talking about Maverick, and then it goes to talking about "I." Who is telling the story? It sounds like this could be a great story of overcoming, but it needs to be a lot more clear on what is happening and who is speaking. You have the start for a great story- keep at it!
This was quite in-depth and extensive in actions and thoughts of all parties concerned.

Thanks for sharing, you have a gift of story telling.