The Official Writing Challenge
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07/26/19
Great, entertaining, descriptive writing with a relevant message. I loved it.
The only red ink, I would suggest is to keep the tense consistent. You tend to flip between past and present. For example, "Here we STOOD in this snake-infested.......and the boy and I ARE...." STAND would keep it consistent.
Very vivid imagery! It is amazing how our versions are so dissimilar to another's. Good job!
07/29/19
Love this entry.
Well done...I was totally drawn in.

Blessings~
08/01/19
Congratulations!
Well done,
Blessings~