The Official Writing Challenge
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I loved all your descriptions! To me, there were too many stories going in different directions, and it became confusing. Maybe by cutting down on such things as the gator or ants and such. Though they were interesting, to me, it seemed to overwhelm me with too much info to rightly process the point of your piece. You are very good with the descriptions. Keep up the writing!
07/23/19
First, I love the scene. Your descriptions bring you right into the setting so much that I can smell the earth Kate is working. I love how you described the alligator as no more threatening than a neighborhood dog with an attitude. And I love the play of words in in-law and in the law. Never saw it like that before. Nice job.