The Official Writing Challenge
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06/06/19
I think paragraphs 1,2,5,6 make a good devotional. The other paragraphs seem to take away, rather than add to the very arresting question God asks in the Garden. That's just my opinion. You made me see God's question in a different light than I did before.
06/07/19
I like your connection between a real life story and our walk with God. To me, the last paragraph about our walk with God is a good question to relate back to the story at the beginning (and the title). I agree with the previous review, though, that some parts take the focus off the main idea. Keep writing! God bless!
I liked this devotional and you definitely hit the topic. I do agree with the comments above, Some paring down of of some of the verbiage would tighten this piece up. Keep on writing!
Great storytelling to bring me in - great message and right on topic. Well done!
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