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I loved your use of sound and repetition! Amazing story and well done!
04/27/19
Lovely! I enjoyed this and thought it was a great use of the topic in content and delivery.

Blessings~
Great reminder of God’s provision.
This is a great story. The nature vs man conflict pulled me in immediately and I was eager to keep reading. When using onamatoepia like in the first line, you might want to put it in italics to show it's a sound (as well as thoughts too). I think the way you represented the sound of the wheelbarrow was fantastic. Some sentences could use some trimming. You don't need AM and morning both. Instead you could just say: around six in the morning.
I enjoyed the short prayers sprinkled about. It shows such an intimate relationship with God. The ending was great--a message of hope, faith, and persevering. And you nailed the topic while creating great mental pictures.