The Official Writing Challenge
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You used great imagery here- I could easily see it all as you described it.
Although poetry is not my favorite genre, you did create some nice mental pictures here. I would encourage you to not include Robert Louis Stevenson's poem as your opening. I know it's a bit older, but have no idea if it is in the public domain, but even if it is, you still need to, at the very least, whenever quoting someone else's work, give the author credit with a citation at the end, citing name of piece, author, and date published or written. You definitely cover the topic in a good way. Your message is clear and quite profound, especially today. Good job.
After a very quick search, I found this site stating that it is in public domain, so may be used, but still should be cited. Check out this page:

God bless~
I am no good at poetry, so I will not even attempt to critique this lovely piece. :-) However, I did try to add rhyme to the next story immediately after reading this poem. lol.

You have done a good job getting your rhythm and rhyme stuck in my head. Keep it up.

~God bless.