The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a wonderful story and so well-told. At first I thought saying Sam is "clearly unencumbered" was a mistake, but as I realized this story was about Special Olympics I understood what was meant. Perhaps you can find a more accurate word choice than 'verbose' to describe Michael's words and hulking presence. Then I would give this an A+.
I love this entry. I agree with the prior comment about unencumbered. You could use unfazed or something similar instead. What a beautiful description of all involved. Very accurate description of disabilities as well (elbows in to keep jerking to a minimum, etc.). You really painted a picture, here. The 2nd to last paragraph is my fav. Absolutely beautiful and such an important thing for all of us to remember. Great job!
I knew it had to be special olympics! They are so wonderful.
I think that the word verbose is inappropriate in this context. I always look up my words just to make sure it's the definition I want. Great analogy, too.
This is lovely. I thought all the descriptions were fantastic, but Mary with her five-foot long snake was the best. I felt like I was right there. Congratulations on ranking 2nd in your level and 11th overall. The highest rankings can be found on the message boards. Happy Dance!