The Official Writing Challenge
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Good job with the subject. I like the story and the examples you cited. Some of the longer paragraphs seemed a bit choppy with the sentence structure to me but over all nice job. Keep on writing!
Good job with the subject. I like the story and the examples you cited. Some of the longer paragraphs seemed a bit choppy with the sentence structure to me but over all nice job. Keep on writing!
Interesting take on the topic. I was confused in places. When you referred to the mother as sister, I thought you were speaking of a nun. I thought Brad was a hyperactive child, but he's a senior in high school? This was a good idea, and with some revisions, could be a great piece.