The Official Writing Challenge
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I'm not an expert in poetry at all, but your piece created some great mental pictures for me. I noticed sometimes you had a rhyme sequence and sometimes not. You definitely did a great job of writing on topic. You made me stop and think too, which is always good. Nice job.
Great thoughts, wonderful message...thank you.
I like your opening lines. I'm in my 60s, but often feel like a teenager! A state of mind!
Liked the message of your piece! The rhythm felt a little choppy, or maybe inconsistent - something to think about. Good job!