The Official Writing Challenge
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03/07/19
Lovely poem. I have three small critiques.

The second stanza may read more smoothly if the last line read, 'some were not yet sure (or, quite sure).

The third stanza first line would also read more flowy if it said, 'explorers left their wives at home.'

Finally, the God part at the end seems a little forced or kind of an after-thought. Maybe including Him in one of the earlier stanzas would make it feel more like it belonged.

Otherwise, I loved the poem!
03/08/19
I enjoyed this beautiful poem.
Thank you,
Blessings~
This is a lovely piece about the many ways the heart grows when distance is between us. I like that you remind us God never leaves our side. Nice job.
A good reminder that not all absences make the heart fonder.