The Official Writing Challenge
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02/14/19
This had me in tears and my heart lurched as I read this entry. It had an authentic tone, and if so...my condolences for your great loss.

Thank you for sharing this heart wrenching story that perhaps will bring comfort to those who might know someone going through Chemo, or someone that passed. This was a powerfully gripping story of truth, sadness, and joy at once.

God bless you~
02/14/19
This made me teary-eyed. If it's a true story, I'm so sorry.

I like how you shared her personality and her prayer with us. You held my attention throughout the story. Keep writing. :)
02/14/19
Nellie's ability to hear from God inspires me to pray for ears to hear for all God's children. At this moment I'm sitting with someone who's young sister has been on a ventilator for 3 weeks. When I read her Nellie's desire to go home, we both got teary eyed, but . . . know Home is the best place to be. Just know that your story was a timely submission for one of your readers.
Your story brought me to tears. The faith of a child.
This is a hard story to read because you did such a great job of introducing me to Nellie, I found my heart aching for her. My main advice would be to not use exclamation points except occasionally in dialog. Instead let your excellent choice of words do your exclaiming for you. My heart ached for the characters. I know they say losing a child is the worst, but losing a grandchild is also right up to one of the worst things. Not only do you grieve the loss of the grand baby, but your child is grieving and you can't do anything to make it better. But God does guide us through these hard times. You did a great job with an emotional story.
02/21/19
Thank you for sharing this tender story. Don't you love that Jesus spoke to Nellie, and Nellie heard and believed His voice. Congratulations on your 2nd Place.