The Official Writing Challenge
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So did they ever find their destination? I enjoyed your story, such a common issue with us, isn't it? I wonder if perhaps you should put thoughts into italics to make it less confusing during dialogue.
02/08/19
I feel like this is just the start of a much longer journey. You do a great job of showing each of the different characters and bringing a duel meaning to the topic.
02/08/19
I feel like this is just the start of a much longer journey. You do a great job of showing each of the different characters and bringing a duel meaning to the topic.
02/09/19
I had to chuckle since the beginning of the story reminded me so much of my husband and me. And of my parents. . . well, and of me as the child who just wanted peace in the family. You made your point well.
I enjoyed this family trek. You do a nice job of showing a few conflicts right away. You did have several POV shifts where you hopped into the thoughts of all three characters. I think this could be even more powerful if entire story was told from the daughter's POV. I really liked how the kid resolved the conflicts too. She was a great character.
Just to show you a way you might have been able to show this story without the POV shifts, I wanted to add some examples. I might suggest something like this: Stephanie squirmed in the back seat. She could fill the tension between her parents building.
“You’re going the wrong way, Edward,” Gloria sighed and then twisted around and whispered to Stephanie. "Men never listen."
Stephanie squirmed and pretended she didn't hear her mother's mutterings.
Her father cleared his throat and peered at her in the rear-view mirror. “This way is faster." Stephanie watched him roll his eyes. She could almost read his mind. She closed her eyes. <i> I bet he's thinking that women always think they're right. Why doesn't he understand I'm a woman too and by thinking or saying derogatory things about females, he's putting me down too? </i>
Of course, she knew her mom wouldn't let his comment go. Stephanie cringed when her mom said, “Fine, let’s pray about it. Lord, please help show him I am right."

I know I made some changes, but wanted to show you how almost the same words can be more powerful if told from just one perspective. It's hard to show other character's thoughts though, so I tried to show it in Stephanie's thoughts. The <> with the I in beginning and /I at end will put what's in those brackets into italics, which is a great way to show thought.
I think you have a powerful story here. My favorite genre to read and write is children's stories, and I believe this would make a great short story for a middle schooler. It needs some tweaking, but would be great in a magazine or maybe in a Sunday School take-home sheet for kids 10 to 13 or so. You have a great message, and having the MC (Stephanie) resolve the conflict makes a great ending for a YA or middle-reader story. I'd love to see you do more in this genre. It's not an easy one, but you seem to have a knack for it.
02/13/19
This was quite interesting and had my attention all the way to through.

God Bless~