The Official Writing Challenge
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01/10/19
Wow! I was not expecting that ending. Well done. Well written and it kept us guessing.

One thing you might do to help your reader see the difference between the sister's paragraphs is use some kind of divider. It could be as simple as a dotted line ------- between each paragraph.
01/10/19
Wonderful writing here!
Great job with the topic, well done, thank you!

God bless~
Very interesting content - I like the way your mind works. I must admit I had trouble following the story line. Perhaps add something to more readily identify who was speaking in each instance.

Good writing.
The descriptions are beautiful, but I don't really get it. April died due to a robbery? But why ddid May? Guess I will have to study it more.
01/14/19
Had some trouble following all the back and forth between characters. Some questions about all that was going on. But I did enjoy the story. Very creative.