The Official Writing Challenge
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What a beautiful point you made in this story, one that I didn't see coming. Well done.
Interesting story, and it certainly has a bit of a twist to it.

Take care with your tenses - you move from present to past quite often. Also, there are missing words - it helps me to read my work aloud because then I see the words I have missed.

Also, most publications prefer that you spell out the word for numbers one-nine, and 10 above use the numbers.
Beautiful message! I truly enjoyed this entry, well done.
Thank you!

God bless~
I enjoyed your story, I kind of saw it coming. Making gaps between paragraphs would make it easier to read. Beautiful concept of the Bride of Christ!
Beautiful story. Did not see her reason for trying on the dress coming. Great job.
God Bless~
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