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I'm an avid reader, and enjoy Christian suspense and romance books. So easy to get lost in them. Yes, I agree that books are better than more and more clothes! I would have liked to read a very eye-catching opening in your article. Why is shopping less important than reading is for you?
01/10/19
This article/story is perhaps a little too literal and does not 'show' but rather 'tells'. Your final point was solid but the way you got to it was really straightforward. I recommend you read some of the Masters entries to get an idea of what kinds of entries make an impact.

Also, it is 'brokenness" with two 'n's'.
01/10/19
This article/story is perhaps a little too literal and does not 'show' but rather 'tells'. Your final point was solid but the way you got to it was really straightforward. I recommend you read some of the Masters entries to get an idea of what kinds of entries make an impact.

Also, it is 'brokenness" with two 'n's'.
01/10/19
I’m guessing this is a brave attempt to follow a nudging to write this year. Congratulations on making the leap.
I think you are TRYING to convey that God encourages you to look/shop for help in spiritual growth more than to shop for ways to look good on the outside. A worthwhile conviction, but this piece needs help in segueing between the two practices.
For example, if you ended the second paragraph and began the third paragraph with something like this:
So when I read those books, I felt better, that I was not alone. (Next paragraph). Often when I want to feel better, I look for something nice for my wardrobe. . .
Hope this helps encourage you to keep looking for ways to improve your ability to convey what God is teaching you.
01/10/19
Wonderful expression of your inner self, thanks for sharing with us.

Faithwriters is such a blessed place as you're among friends and those who enjoy sharing the Word...and may you continue to pursue this in avid fashion.

I enjoyed reading your entry.

God bless~
I love your wisdom and grace.
01/12/19
I am so glad you have decided to join FaithWriters.

I can sense a story in here (Currently, it is more of a narrative). I think dialogue would add more interest right away. The use of strong verbs would also help. For Example:

The dog was happy.

Snoopy jumped on my lap and kissed me on the lips.



I really liked the idea of shopping in a library. I think it's original and out of the box. When I first started entering the challenges, I received some great advice: As soon as you see the topic, write down the first five things you think of, then rip it up and throw it away because it's probably the same five things others think of. Sometimes I get too far out of the box, but I think the idea of library shopping was brilliant. I'd have loved to read even more about it, maybe even something to make me chuckle. Try to paint a picture for your reader. You're off to a great start with an original idea. Don't get discouraged, and keep writing. I'm excited to see what you might think of next.