The Official Writing Challenge
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I liked your story and it really got the message through to us. We all at some time felt like that outsider and Thank the Lord He took us in and cleaned us up.
Your story was sweet and deep. I think we have all felt like Black at some point in our lives. So, he was relatable. Also, I've read that fiction stories written from a pet's perspective are VERY marketable right now. I had never read one before. I really liked yours.
This would be a very nice story to tell or read to small children. It has a draw to it.

There was one sentence, though, that could easily be fixed up. Read it out loud to your self and you will see where it is.
I echo the previous comments that this is a submissible story. It does need a tweak or two though and reading out loud always helps. Very well done.